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These are the pencils for page one of 'apologue' (working title only). I think when it comes right down to it, I'm interested in humans rather than superhumans, so I thought I'd just try to tell a story.
I've been thinking about this for a while, and have played around with it in stuff like Idiot Wind and IRON, but I wanted to try to distil out what I think's interesting - narrative structure and people. I'm well aware that this isn't commercial, and I can't imagine it'd ever be something that would see print, even if I were able to produce something good enough art and writing wise. Still, I think that unless I try to draw what I want to, I'll end up giving up altogether.
At least I can have said I tried to do what I wanted to.
I've left the 'Request critiques' box checked as I really am looking for some feedback and suggestions.
All pencil work was done in MangaStudio.
All work is ©2014 Jonathan Wyke
I've been thinking about this for a while, and have played around with it in stuff like Idiot Wind and IRON, but I wanted to try to distil out what I think's interesting - narrative structure and people. I'm well aware that this isn't commercial, and I can't imagine it'd ever be something that would see print, even if I were able to produce something good enough art and writing wise. Still, I think that unless I try to draw what I want to, I'll end up giving up altogether.
At least I can have said I tried to do what I wanted to.
I've left the 'Request critiques' box checked as I really am looking for some feedback and suggestions.
All pencil work was done in MangaStudio.
All work is ©2014 Jonathan Wyke
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I can't believe you don't have a string of comments on these - I was immediately drawn to them when they appeared in my 'watched' gallery (via comicbook pros club, I think). I love Mike Mayhew and this little series is very reminiscent of his art. I love the faces and the intensity in the conversation - and then the tenderness and love in page 2 and the sadness you convey in page 3...love it 
The only suggestion I can make for improvement would be this - the faces are so beautifully rendered with lots of light and shade but some parts of the figures don't match that attention to detail. Examples would be his shoulder in panel 1 and the sheet in panel 3 - Page 2 is better in this respect - the sheet is beautifully conveyed with a few strokes of shading and it brings that page to life. Whereas the white spaces on this page draw my eye to the lines.
Over all though, I really do think these are stunning and I'm now watching you as a result
The only suggestion I can make for improvement would be this - the faces are so beautifully rendered with lots of light and shade but some parts of the figures don't match that attention to detail. Examples would be his shoulder in panel 1 and the sheet in panel 3 - Page 2 is better in this respect - the sheet is beautifully conveyed with a few strokes of shading and it brings that page to life. Whereas the white spaces on this page draw my eye to the lines.
Over all though, I really do think these are stunning and I'm now watching you as a result